Mr.Panuwat



                                   Draft 1'Step in setting up my own fitness business'
            Today, many people are struggling with obesity because eating junk food.  Obesity brings about many diseases which it makes people has more health care. Therefore, fitness is the first thing that people think about.
To eliminate completely the problem of obesity in society, it’s a reason why I want to set up my own fitness business.
            First step, I will name my fitness that “FIT FITNESS” which FIT meaningful healthy. Then I will make a business plan for my own business. I have to study for understand about fitness business. I will observe activities within 2 month. I think it can help me get more understand about this business. When I was studying then I have to make market research for choose target markets because I will know who will come to use my fitness. Next, I have to decide a location to locate my fitness. I think it have to has a lot of people and convenient parking. I believe that a good location will make us get advantage. Moreover, market strategy is an important thing that I will do too.
           Second step, I will not have my own fitness business if I lack of money. I started to keep the money since I was entrance to university. Now, I have one capital that is not enough for setting up my own fitness business. So, I have to take my business plan to the bank for loan when I graduated Bachelor's degree. I think I will get money from the bank with my good business plan. However, I have to have good managed obtained money from the bank as well.
           Last step, I have to research fitness activities and class exercise such as yoga, aerobic dance, body balance, circuit training, boxing, weight training and etc. to be appropriate with target groups. I will find knowledge and experience staff for teaching in each classes. Consequently, I surely our customer will trust in Fit Fitness. Besides, I have to find high quality fitness equipments or fitness machines for the safest of customer too.         
            Finally, all steps in setting my own fitness business are so difficult. The business is not easy. I have to compete with many fitness businesses. How will I do it success? Certainly, I will devote to my fitness business with my spirit and energy. Fit Fitness will setting up in the future. It isn’t just a dream. We don’t want to see fat people.    


Cosmetic Surgery Draft 2

                 The doctor said “I always tell my patients who will plastic surgery that you don’t prettify when you have a surgery, anything can happen. Everyone is at risk.” Although, cosmetic surgery has many risk but it changes life of many people. There are 4 reasons why I want to have a cosmetic surgery.
                 First of all, if you are beautiful, you will have more confidence than other people. However, if you are not beautiful, cosmetic surgery will help you have confidence and self esteem like beautiful people. Moreover, cosmetic surgery will help you success in your careers. Some jobs are for good looking people such as flight attendants, movie stars and models. In addition, it will help for your love life. Guys and girls are mostly attracted by good looking people. You will have many choices and higher chances to get married. Besides, you can’t deny that beautiful people are given more social opportunities and included in high society. You will easily move to a higher status.
                At last, the cosmetic surgery can make you get a better life but it also makes you get a risk in your life. If you decide to perform cosmetic surgery, you will have to learn about it as carefully as you can.

    
                             Medical Receptionist Draft 1                                              
Medical receptionists are very important to a medical office or hospital. There are several responsibilities that the medical receptionist should be handled. They work in many places and responsible for answering the telephone calls and scheduling patient’s appointments. However, the medical receptionists must have work requires various type of knowledge and skills. They have many roles like general officer and can work in the shifts worked and standard office hours. Therefore, there are no specific requirements required because it depends on the type of the medical receptionist.

 Medical Receptionist Draft 2
Medical receptionists are very important to a medical office or hospital. There are several responsibilities that the medical receptionist should handle. They work in many places and responsible for answering the telephone calls and scheduling patient’s appointments. Therefore, the medical receptionists must have various types of knowledge and skills. They have many roles like general officer and can work in the shifts worked and standard office hours. The medical receptionist has no specific requirements required because it depends on the type of them.
 
 
Organic foods (Draft 1)
There are three reasons why people should eat organic foods.First, organic foods are foods that are good for health because they don’t contain chemical food additives and dangerous pesticides. Furthermore, there are organic food advocates claim that organic foods are more nutritious than conventionally grown foods. Second, organic foods are good for human. There aren’t effects for farmer’s health because they don’t use synthetic pesticides and chemical fertilizers in organic farming. Organic foods are not foods derived from genetically modified organisms (GMOs) which are safe for human because genetically modified food may be cause of excessive pesticide residues in foods. Third, organic foods are good for environment. Organic farms do not consume or release synthetic pesticides into the environment which have the potential to harm soil, water and wildlife. Moreover, there is dramatic evidence that organic farming can decrease the amount of carbon dioxide which is a cause of Global Warming. Thereby, the organic foods are the best choice for the consumers.

Source:
http://www.fda.moph.go.th/fda-net/html/product/food/food_web/gmomain_files/gmo1.htm
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Organic_food
http://nutrition.about.com/od/recipesmenus/a/organic.htm
http://www.mofga.org/tabid/166/Default.aspx
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Organic_farming
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Genetically_modified_food
http://realfoodlover.wordpress.com/2010/05/05/eat-organic-reduce-carbon/
http://www.organicconsumers.org/organic/stabalize062404.cfm

                              Organic foods (Draft 2)

There are three reasons why people should eat organic foods. First, organic foods are foods that are good for health, because they neither contain chemical food additives nor dangerous pesticides. Furthermore, there are organic food advocates claiming that organic foods are more nutritious than conventionally grown foods. Second, organic foods are good for human. There aren’t effects to farmer’s health,
because they don’t use synthetic pesticides and chemical fertilizers in organic farming. Moreover organic foods are not foods derived from genetically modified organisms (GMOs) which are safe for human because genetically modified food maybe cause of excessive pesticide residues in foods. Third, organic foods are good for environment. It neither consumes nor releases synthetic pesticides into the environment which have the potential to harm soil, water and wildlife. In addition, there is dramatic evidence that organic farming can decrease the amount of carbon dioxide which is a cause of Global Warming. Thereby, organic foods are the best choice for the consumers.
 
 Cosmetic Surgery
The doctor said “I always tell my patients who will plastic surgery that you don’t prettify when you have a surgery, anything can happen. Everyone is at risk.” Although, cosmetic surgery has many risk but it changes life of many people. There are 4 reasons why I want to have a cosmetic surgery.
First of all, if you are beautiful, you will have more confident than common people. However, if you are not beautiful, cosmetic surgery will help you have confident and self esteem like beautiful people. Moreover, cosmetic surgery will help you success in your careers. Some jobs are for good looking people such as flight attendant, movie star and model. In addition, it will help for your love life. Guys and girls are mostly attracted by good looking people. You will have many choice and higher chance to get married. Besides, you can’t deny that beautiful people are given more opportunity in society and included in high society. You will easier to move to a higher status.
               At last, cosmetic surgery has both advantages and disadvantages. If you decide to perform cosmetic surgery, you will have to learning about it too much.





Cosmetic Surgery Draft 2

                 The doctor said “I always tell my patients who will plastic surgery that you don’t prettify when you have a surgery, anything can happen. Everyone is at risk.” Although, cosmetic surgery has many risk but it changes life of many people. There are 4 reasons why I want to have a cosmetic surgery.
                 First of all, if you are beautiful, you will have more confidence than other people. However, if you are not beautiful, cosmetic surgery will help you have confidence and self esteem like beautiful people. Moreover, cosmetic surgery will help you success in your careers. Some jobs are for good looking people such as flight attendants, movie stars and models. In addition, it will help for your love life. Guys and girls are mostly attracted by good looking people. You will have many choices and higher chances to get married. Besides, you can’t deny that beautiful people are given more social opportunities and included in high society. You will easily move to a higher status.
                At last, the cosmetic surgery can make you get a better life but it also makes you get a risk in your life. If you decide to perform cosmetic surgery, you will have to learn about it as carefully as you can.
























6 comments:

  1. You should combine "They work in many places" and "can work in the shifts worked and standard office hours" to make sentnce smoother

    "There are several responsibilities that the medical receptionist should be handled, (such as, for instance(in stead of however)) responsible for answering the telephone calls and scheduling patient’s appointments."

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  2. " However, the medical receptionists must have work requires various type of knowledge and skills."

    Suggestion:
    The word "however" is not an optimal conjunctive adverb here.
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    You can say the medical receptionist's work requires...
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    the work requires...
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    The word "therefore" is not an optimal conjunctive adverb here.

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  3. There are several responsibilities that the medical receptionist should be handled.
    - should handle.
    However, the medical receptionists must have work requires various type of knowledge and skills.
    - cut 'work requires'
    Therefore, there are no specific requirements required because it depends on the type of the medical receptionist.
    Therefore isn't a right signal word.

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  4. For draft 2
    you may give example for who want to know detail of receptionist works.

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