Draft 1'Step in setting up my own fitness business'
Today, many people are struggling with obesity because eating junk food. Obesity brings about many diseases which it makes people has more health care. Therefore, fitness is the first thing that people think about. To eliminate completely the problem of obesity in society, it’s a reason why I want to set up my own fitness business.
Today, many people are struggling with obesity because eating junk food. Obesity brings about many diseases which it makes people has more health care. Therefore, fitness is the first thing that people think about. To eliminate completely the problem of obesity in society, it’s a reason why I want to set up my own fitness business.
First step, I will name my
fitness that “FIT FITNESS” which FIT meaningful healthy. Then I will make a
business plan for my own business. I have to study for understand about fitness
business. I will observe activities within 2 month. I think it can help me get
more understand about this business. When I was studying then I have
to make market research for choose target markets because I will know who will
come to use my fitness. Next, I have to decide a location to locate my fitness.
I think it have to has a lot of people and convenient parking. I believe that a
good location will make us get advantage. Moreover, market strategy is an
important thing that I will do too.
Second step, I will not have
my own fitness business if I lack of money. I started to keep the money since
I was entrance to university. Now, I have one capital that is not enough for
setting up my own fitness business. So, I have to take my business plan to the
bank for loan when I graduated Bachelor's
degree. I think I will get money from the bank with my good business plan.
However, I have to have good managed obtained money from the bank as well.
Last step, I have to research
fitness activities and class exercise such as yoga, aerobic dance, body
balance, circuit training, boxing, weight training and etc. to be appropriate with
target groups. I will find knowledge and experience staff for teaching in each
classes. Consequently, I surely our customer will trust in Fit Fitness. Besides,
I have to find high quality fitness equipments or fitness machines for the safest
of customer too.
Finally, all steps in setting my own fitness business are so difficult. The business is not easy. I have to compete with many fitness businesses. How will I do it success? Certainly, I will devote to my fitness business with my spirit and energy. Fit Fitness will setting up in the future. It isn’t just a dream. We don’t want to see fat people.
Finally, all steps in setting my own fitness business are so difficult. The business is not easy. I have to compete with many fitness businesses. How will I do it success? Certainly, I will devote to my fitness business with my spirit and energy. Fit Fitness will setting up in the future. It isn’t just a dream. We don’t want to see fat people.
Cosmetic Surgery Draft 2
The doctor said “I always tell my patients who will plastic surgery that you don’t prettify when you have a surgery, anything can happen. Everyone is at risk.” Although, cosmetic surgery has many risk but it changes life of many people. There are 4 reasons why I want to have a cosmetic surgery.
First of all, if you are beautiful, you will have more confidence than other people. However, if you are not beautiful, cosmetic surgery will help you have confidence and self esteem like beautiful people. Moreover, cosmetic surgery will help you success in your careers. Some jobs are for good looking people such as flight attendants, movie stars and models. In addition, it will help for your love life. Guys and girls are mostly attracted by good looking people. You will have many choices and higher chances to get married. Besides, you can’t deny that beautiful people are given more social opportunities and included in high society. You will easily move to a higher status.
At last, the cosmetic surgery can make you get a better life but it also makes you get a risk in your life. If you decide to perform cosmetic surgery, you will have to learn about it as carefully as you can.
Medical Receptionist Draft 1
Medical receptionists are very important to a medical office or hospital. There are several responsibilities that the medical receptionist should be handled. They work in many places and responsible for answering the telephone calls and scheduling patient’s appointments. However, the medical receptionists must have work requires various type of knowledge and skills. They have many roles like general officer and can work in the shifts worked and standard office hours. Therefore, there are no specific requirements required because it depends on the type of the medical receptionist.
Medical Receptionist Draft 2
The
doctor said “I always tell my patients who will plastic surgery that you don’t
prettify when you have a surgery, anything can happen. Everyone
is at risk.” Although, cosmetic surgery has many risk but it changes life
of many people. There are 4 reasons why I want to have a cosmetic surgery.
First of
all, if you are beautiful, you will have more confident than common people. However,
if you are not beautiful, cosmetic surgery will help you have confident and
self esteem like beautiful people. Moreover, cosmetic surgery will help you
success in your careers. Some jobs are for good looking people such as flight
attendant, movie star and model. In addition, it will help for your love life. Guys
and girls are mostly attracted by good looking people. You will have many
choice and higher chance to get married. Besides, you can’t deny that beautiful
people are given more opportunity in society and included in high society. You
will easier to move to a higher status.
At last, cosmetic surgery has both
advantages and disadvantages. If you decide to perform cosmetic
surgery, you will have to learning about it too much.
Cosmetic Surgery
Draft 2
The doctor said “I always tell my patients who will
plastic surgery that you don’t prettify when you have a surgery, anything can
happen. Everyone is at risk.” Although, cosmetic surgery has many
risk but it changes life of many people. There are 4 reasons why I want to have
a cosmetic surgery.
First of all, if you are beautiful, you will have more
confidence than other people. However, if you are not beautiful, cosmetic surgery
will help you have confidence and self esteem like beautiful people. Moreover,
cosmetic surgery will help you success in your careers. Some jobs are for good
looking people such as flight attendants, movie stars and models. In addition,
it will help for your love life. Guys and girls are mostly attracted by good
looking people. You will have many choices and higher chances to get married.
Besides, you can’t deny that beautiful people are given more social opportunities
and included in high society. You will easily move to a higher status.
At
last, the cosmetic surgery can make you get a better life but it also makes
you get a risk in your life. If you decide to perform cosmetic
surgery, you will have to learn about it as carefully as you can.
You should combine "They work in many places" and "can work in the shifts worked and standard office hours" to make sentnce smoother
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" However, the medical receptionists must have work requires various type of knowledge and skills."
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The word "therefore" is not an optimal conjunctive adverb here.
There are several responsibilities that the medical receptionist should be handled.
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However, the medical receptionists must have work requires various type of knowledge and skills.
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Therefore, there are no specific requirements required because it depends on the type of the medical receptionist.
Therefore isn't a right signal word.
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